{"id":1762,"date":"2022-07-27T18:14:39","date_gmt":"2022-07-27T18:14:39","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=1762"},"modified":"2022-07-28T20:18:06","modified_gmt":"2022-07-28T20:18:06","slug":"4-8-sample-body-paragraph","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-8-sample-body-paragraph\/","title":{"rendered":"4.8 Sample Body Paragraph"},"content":{"raw":"A strong body paragraph should support the claim you make in your thesis statement. Our sample body paragraph develops a key supporting idea (sub-claim) from the argumentative thesis in <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/5-2-finding-the-thesis\/\">section 3.4<\/a>, which is reproduced here:\r\n<p class=\"no-indent\" style=\"padding-left: 40px\">Teenagers and young adults seem to use their phones everywhere\u2014in the classroom, at the dinner table, even in restroom stalls\u2014because they want to stay connected to their friends and peers at all times, but I think spending that much time online is detrimental\u00a0to their social skills and mental health.<\/p>\r\n<p class=\"no-indent\">The sub-claims that the writer of this thesis statement will have to support in the body of the essay are<\/p>\r\n\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li>spending too much time online is detrimental to social skills<\/li>\r\n \t<li>spending too much time online is detrimental to mental health<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\nThe following sample body paragraph begins to develop the second of these sub-claims:\r\n<p class=\"indent\"><span style=\"background-color: #ffff99\">In addition to impeding social development,<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #00ff00\">excessive cellphone use can contribute to a range of mental health disorders.<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #00ffff\">For example,<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #ff00ff\">Jean M. Twinge et al., a team of psychology researchers from San Diego State and Florida State Universities, conclude that increased screen time in adolescents is associated with a higher risk of depressive symptoms when compared to those engaged in nonscreen activities (9).<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #00ffff\">Moreover,<span style=\"background-color: #ffffff\">\u00a0<\/span><\/span><span style=\"background-color: #ff00ff\">in the same study, the authors report that \u201cadolescents using devices 5 or more hours a day (vs. 1 hour) were 66% more likely to have at least one suicide-related outcome\u201d (9). <\/span><span style=\"background-color: #999999\">Teenagers and young adults are not only more likely to engage in problematic use or overuse of cellphones, but because they are still maturing cognitively, they are especially vulnerable to the psychological repercussions.<\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<h2 class=\"no-indent\">Color Coding Key:<\/h2>\r\n<span style=\"background-color: #ffff99\">Paragraph-level transition<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/8-3-developing-relationships-between-ideas\/\">section 4.7<\/a> for help with paragraph-level transitions)\r\n\r\n<span style=\"background-color: #00ff00\">Topic sentence<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-3-topic-sentences\/\">section 4.3<\/a> for help with topic sentences)\r\n\r\n<span style=\"background-color: #00ffff\">Sentence-level transitions<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/8-3-developing-relationships-between-ideas\/\">section 4.7<\/a> for help with sentence-level transitions)\r\n\r\n<span style=\"background-color: #ff00ff\">Supporting evidence<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-3-adding-support-to-body-paragraphs\/\">section 4.4<\/a> for help with supporting evidence)\r\n\r\n<span style=\"background-color: #999999\">Explaining the evidence<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-5-explaining-evidence\/\">section 4.5<\/a> for help with explaining evidence)","rendered":"<p>A strong body paragraph should support the claim you make in your thesis statement. Our sample body paragraph develops a key supporting idea (sub-claim) from the argumentative thesis in <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/5-2-finding-the-thesis\/\">section 3.4<\/a>, which is reproduced here:<\/p>\n<p class=\"no-indent\" style=\"padding-left: 40px\">Teenagers and young adults seem to use their phones everywhere\u2014in the classroom, at the dinner table, even in restroom stalls\u2014because they want to stay connected to their friends and peers at all times, but I think spending that much time online is detrimental\u00a0to their social skills and mental health.<\/p>\n<p class=\"no-indent\">The sub-claims that the writer of this thesis statement will have to support in the body of the essay are<\/p>\n<ol>\n<li>spending too much time online is detrimental to social skills<\/li>\n<li>spending too much time online is detrimental to mental health<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<p>The following sample body paragraph begins to develop the second of these sub-claims:<\/p>\n<p class=\"indent\"><span style=\"background-color: #ffff99\">In addition to impeding social development,<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #00ff00\">excessive cellphone use can contribute to a range of mental health disorders.<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #00ffff\">For example,<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #ff00ff\">Jean M. Twinge et al., a team of psychology researchers from San Diego State and Florida State Universities, conclude that increased screen time in adolescents is associated with a higher risk of depressive symptoms when compared to those engaged in nonscreen activities (9).<\/span> <span style=\"background-color: #00ffff\">Moreover,<span style=\"background-color: #ffffff\">\u00a0<\/span><\/span><span style=\"background-color: #ff00ff\">in the same study, the authors report that \u201cadolescents using devices 5 or more hours a day (vs. 1 hour) were 66% more likely to have at least one suicide-related outcome\u201d (9). <\/span><span style=\"background-color: #999999\">Teenagers and young adults are not only more likely to engage in problematic use or overuse of cellphones, but because they are still maturing cognitively, they are especially vulnerable to the psychological repercussions.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 class=\"no-indent\">Color Coding Key:<\/h2>\n<p><span style=\"background-color: #ffff99\">Paragraph-level transition<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/8-3-developing-relationships-between-ideas\/\">section 4.7<\/a> for help with paragraph-level transitions)<\/p>\n<p><span style=\"background-color: #00ff00\">Topic sentence<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-3-topic-sentences\/\">section 4.3<\/a> for help with topic sentences)<\/p>\n<p><span style=\"background-color: #00ffff\">Sentence-level transitions<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/8-3-developing-relationships-between-ideas\/\">section 4.7<\/a> for help with sentence-level transitions)<\/p>\n<p><span style=\"background-color: #ff00ff\">Supporting evidence<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-3-adding-support-to-body-paragraphs\/\">section 4.4<\/a> for help with supporting evidence)<\/p>\n<p><span style=\"background-color: #999999\">Explaining the evidence<\/span> (See <a href=\"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/chapter\/4-5-explaining-evidence\/\">section 4.5<\/a> for help with explaining evidence)<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":24,"menu_order":8,"comment_status":"closed","ping_status":"closed","template":"","meta":{"pb_show_title":"on","pb_short_title":"","pb_subtitle":"","pb_authors":["amanda-lloyd"],"pb_section_license":""},"chapter-type":[],"contributor":[81],"license":[],"class_list":["post-1762","chapter","type-chapter","status-publish","hentry","contributor-amanda-lloyd"],"part":532,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/1762","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/chapter"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/24"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=1762"}],"version-history":[{"count":14,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/1762\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":1798,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/1762\/revisions\/1798"}],"part":[{"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/parts\/532"}],"metadata":[{"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/1762\/metadata\/"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=1762"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"chapter-type","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapter-type?post=1762"},{"taxonomy":"contributor","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/contributor?post=1762"},{"taxonomy":"license","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/pressbooks.ulib.csuohio.edu\/csu-fyw-rhetoric\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/license?post=1762"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}